Tips and Tricks wording

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Tips and Tricks wording

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TL;DR
Improved wording for two items in the English version of Tips & tricks

What ?
1) Construction robots
This was mentioned by gGeorg on Nov 29, 2020 as a side note and was not addressed.
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In case there is not sufficient resolution in the image as attached change 'creating' to 'created'.

2) Storage chest
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In case there is not sufficient resolution in the image as attached change 'also provided' to 'available'.
Why ?
These wording changes should make the information easier to understand.
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Re: Tips and Tricks wording

Post by BicycleEater »

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The first has another minor issue further on:
"when friendly building is destroyed and needs to be rebuilt" -> "when a friendly building is destroyed and needs to be rebuilt"
or:
"when friendly building is destroyed and needs to be rebuilt" -> "when friendly buildings are destroyed and need to be rebuilt"


The second can be improved:
original:
- Any items in the storage chests are also provided to be used for logistic or construction orders.

replacement:
- Any items in the storage chests are available for use by logistic or construction orders.
(replacing "to be used for" with "for use by", and correcting plurality of logistics)
or:
- Any items in storage chests are available for use by logistic or construction orders.
(referring to the storage chests in the general rather than the specific)
or:
- Any items in storage chests are available for use by logistic requests or construction orders.
(clarifying the plurality of logistics to refer to multiple requests)


Also, third line of first picture:
"selecting the desired entities by [Item: Deconstruction planner]." -> "selecting the desired entities with the [Item: Deconstruction planner].
(more consistent with the plurality or a deconstruction planner)

Fourth line of first picture:
"created by the usage of [Item: Upgrade planner]." -> "created using the [Item: Upgrade planner]."
or:
"created by the usage of [Item: Upgrade planner]." -> "created with the [Item: Upgrade planner]."

Fifth line, first picture:
"These orders are also created when using" -> "These orders can also be created when using"
(clarifying that not all orders are created every time)

These are all total nitpicks, but sound either clearer, or more concise, although I understand that this is a personal opinion.
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